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The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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A glance at the bar chart provided reveals
price
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the price
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 percentage of clothing exported from several countries during two years (1997 and 2003). It is evident that
average
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the average
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 cost
for
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of
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 a kilo of cloth imported into
European
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the European
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 Union has been growing in 2003 in comparison to 1997.
To begin
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 with, it is worth noticing that Argentina displays the highest amount (by up to 25%) among other nations.
Further
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, it is a fact that Brazil has similar
price
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prices
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 in both mentioned years.
Moreover
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, Japan and India
have
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 not
shown
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an
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 considerable difference (about 13%) in 2003
although
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 in 1997
reveals
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 a remarked
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similarity
 (approximately 10%).
On the other hand
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, Bangladesh has the lowest amount in importing clothes to
European
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the European
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 Union, 2 and 6 percent for 1993 and 2003, respectively. China holds
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 exhibition
displays
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that displays
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 an average cost between India and Japan.
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, it should not
been
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 forgotten that Japan is only the community lessened clothes importing in two years.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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