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Recently, flooding in many big countries often happens worldwide and it frequently causes disaster to many people living in urban areas. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Flooding that recently
occured
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occurred
 in several
contries
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countries
,
in particular
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on
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development
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 countries like Indonesia, makes
people
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 in both rural and urban
areas
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 more suffering.
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, flooding, like
others
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 natural disasters, is in odd moments hard to understand why it happens.
This
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ilustrate
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illustrate
 the triggers
as well as
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 the costs that involve in flooding. In
the
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a
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 society with
lack
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a lack
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 of technology
of
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or
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 information,
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, flooding is allegedly caused by the divine punishment for
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human
negligance
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negligence
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This
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people
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 who live in rural
areas
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.
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, those who live in urban
areas
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 with some up-to-date
informations
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 through
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 advances may see that climate
changes
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 is the most reasonable way
for
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to
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 flooding causes
in
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which contributes to
on
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high sea
level
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levels
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 and
extremly
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extreme
 and/or extraordinary
fainfall
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rainfall
.
However
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, the different approaches in both rural and urban
areas
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 have no meaning when they are not aware
what
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 they
supposed
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 to do to prevent the flood. The wave of flooding remains striking anything it may face, including
people
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's properties.
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, the potential effect of flooding is not only disturbing
people
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 but
also
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 exceeding
social
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 gap. When the rich may be able to
recovery
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 as
quick
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 as possible from their suffering, poor man
need
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 more effort and hand to
raise
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rise
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 from their misery. In conclusion,
people
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 should
more
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prepare
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 to avoid the destructive effects of flooding that may happen whenever it comes. By basic education and knowledge of natural
disaster
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disasters
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 run by government or non-government
organization
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organizations
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,
for example
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,
people
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 can mitigate the risks of
the
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apply
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flooding.

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task achievement
To improve task response, consider using more specific examples. For instance, mention any particular incidents of flooding that have been reported recently and their impacts.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence and cohesion by ensuring a more logical flow of ideas between paragraphs. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence to make the progression of ideas smoother.
task achievement
Provide a more comprehensive explanation and exploration of each cause and effect discussed. Try to balance both sides of the discussion with equal depth.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction presents a clear outline of the essay's focus on illustrating the triggers and costs of flooding.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively suggests practical solutions to mitigate flooding impacts, showing insight and forward thinking.
supported main points
The essay successfully contrasts different perceptions of flooding causes between rural and urban areas, illustrating an understanding of varied societal views.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Drainage systems
  • Infrastructure
  • Climate change
  • Extreme weather events
  • Surface runoff
  • Deforestation
  • Displacement
  • Waterborne diseases
  • Economic strain
  • Contaminated water supplies
  • Green spaces
  • Livelihoods
  • Concrete jungles
  • Social impacts
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