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The tendency of human being to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

#tendency #copy #popularity #fashion #clothes #consumer #goods
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Since
,
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apply
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 every single
person
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want
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wants
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 to
copy
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 the next
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person
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person's
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 style
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this days
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this day
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. It is believed that, usually
people
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 like to be dressed as the next
person
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 and have those items which the other is having.
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, it is an argued issue whether to
copy
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others
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others'
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trend
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trends
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 and have what products they are having or have your own fashion sense. I completely
accord
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 with
this
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 notion as it trending as well
people
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likes
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like
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 to have
more
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a more
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 comfortable
life
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.
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 with the most prominent reason,
people
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 often like to have the same
dress
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 as
other
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others
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 is putting as they have a
gready
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great
 habit. If any
dress
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 is trending in the market almost half a
dozens
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 of
people
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 will have it. Whatever their economic condition is they always love to be
well dressed
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well-dressed
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infront
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in front
 of their friends and
colleguages
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colleagues
.
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: My sister saw a girl
being
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dressed in
crop
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 top and a long
dress
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last
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sunday
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 and the next day I
have seen
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saw
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 her closet with the same
dress
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 only
different
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 was the colour.
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 to
this
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,
people
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 love to have a comfortable
life
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thus
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 they buy various goods which will make their work easy and fast. And seeing those other
people
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 would
also
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 like to have the same relaxing
life
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 as that of the
person
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 having various facilities.
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: I myself have bought a washing
maching
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machine
 after seeing that in my
friend
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friend's
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 house.
Furthermore
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, there are various
occassion
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occasions
occasion
 in my country where one likes to
copy
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 another either for comfort or for fashion
trend
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trends
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.
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, there are various times in a year
where
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when
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 one
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copy
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copies
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 another dressing sense as well
prefer
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prefers
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 to have the goods which
are making
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make
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 your
life
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 more relaxing and
conforting
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comforting
.
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introduction
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supported main points
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