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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the precentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the precentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The chart illustrates how many
exports
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 in different earnings (
petroleum
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products
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, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
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, and
textiles
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) in 2015 and 2016.
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 the table displays the percentage of difference in values in one year.
Overall
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, the majority of
exports
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 are in
petroleum
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products
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,
while
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 the least of
exports
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 are in
textiles
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.
Although
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 the most of change in values started in 2015 to 2016 in
textiles
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,
petroleum
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products
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 have the lowest percentage of change in values. The proportion of
exports
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 in
petroleum
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 categories little growth around 3% starting around 61% in 2015 to 64% in 2016. Followed by the other categories, engineered items increased by around 8.5% starting at lower than 60% in 2015 and more than 60% in 2016.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of
exports
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 in gems and jewellery decreased by 5.18% around 46% in 2015 to around 41% in 2016.
Also
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, the value of agriculture
products
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 showed little growth only 0.81% become to 32% in 2016.
Additionally
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, the least of
exports
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 in
textiles
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 than other items around 25% in 2015 but the number of
change
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 is higher peaking at 15.24% and reaching more than 30% in one year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, petroleum, products, textiles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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