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Learning in one's native tongue yields better school scores than learning a medium language. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today, every time people turn on the television or flick through the pages of a newspaper, they may learn about how learning in one's native
tongue
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 yields better
school
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 scores than learning in a medium language.
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, what are the most effective ways to deal with the rise of modernity in a society? Some people believe that the best way to mother
tongue
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 is by teaching them. I completely agree with
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 opinion and in
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 essay, I will support my idea with an example.
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, one reason why I agree with
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 statement is that mothers should teach their children in their native language, as it helps the
child
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 feel comfortable and connected with their culture.
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, another reason for my agreement is that learning in one's mother
tongue
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 can make the learning process smoother and more natural for the
child
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.
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, there is an agreement that big impact on the
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 because the
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is
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can
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 easily learn
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 native
tongue
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. In fact, children have a lot of knowledge up to three years old and I expected better from your
school
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, the current situation does not meet the standards of quality and service that I have come to associate with your
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. The way of conclusion,
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 it is commonly believed that
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 reason higher than learning to medium language is the best way to deal with the problem, I believe it is too soft and impractical for the majority of causes. Personally, I think
school
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 should be the
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 option when all else has failed.

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coherence
Improve clarity and organization. The essay can benefit from a clearer structure, perhaps by outlining the main points at the start and elaborating on them systematically.
task response
Strengthen examples and arguments. The examples provided need to be more specific and relevant to the main argument.
structure
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, which helps provide a framework for the argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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