In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Parents
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plays
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the most significant role in developing
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child's
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mental and physical development.
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role could be
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carried
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along with
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the age
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between
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and
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. It seems
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this
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gap
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is greater
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in some countries than it used to be in the past. In my opinion, it's better to have a shorter between
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and
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.
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, a greater
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between
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and
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is
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beneficial
in many ways.
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as, older
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have more financial
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stability
which could
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child's
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the child's
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education, treatments, better living experience, entertainment,
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hobbies
etc. In
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scenerio
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scenario
,
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parents
also
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have more experience in
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from which a
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can learn better things to do with
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. It's indeed a
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privilege
. But, younger
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parents
patients
can do a lot better than older
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parents
patients
in many effective
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of
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parenting
.
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, they are energetic which allows them to engage directly with their
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in lots of physical activities like playing, walking,
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, reading etc. which directly affects
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child's
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a child's
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mental and physical development.
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, younger
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are tends
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to be more
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friendly
with
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children
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which
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to bridge the
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between generations. When a
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consider
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his/her
parents
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as a friend, they share almost everything with them which leads them
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right way to do everything with their
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.
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, younger
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get more time to raise and support their
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until they establish
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theirs
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life
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which is a very significant point in
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debate. In conclusion, both aged and younger
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could support
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children
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in different ways. But,
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the facts I mentioned above it's been clearly established that a greater
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between
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and
children
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do
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not
otweigh
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outweigh
the disadvantage. It's quite the
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The essay has a clear introduction stating the writer's opinion on the issue.
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The writer raises several valid points about the advantages of both younger and older parents.
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The conclusion attempts to summarize the arguments presented.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age gap
  • financial stability
  • educational opportunities
  • maturity
  • experience
  • patience
  • health issues
  • generational disconnect
  • relate
  • economic support
  • fertility treatments
  • physical activities
  • independence
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