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The diagram below explains how change the tyre

The diagram below explains how change the tyre
The picture
show
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shows
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steps
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the steps
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 of changing a damaged
tyre
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.
Overall
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 , there are about 12 stages in removing and installing
new
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a new
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wheel
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 by yourself on the road with instruments.
Firstly
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, when
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wheel
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the wheel
a wheel
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 of
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car
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a car
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damaged
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is damaged
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 because of some
reasons
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reason
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 like nails on the road, try to find
safe
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a safe
the safe
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 place without any panics
for
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or
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Correct article usage
a pull
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pull over
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pullover
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.
Then
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 turn hazard lights to warn other drivers and to obey traffic rules .
Next
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The next
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 step is taking
necessary
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the necessary
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 instruments
such
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 as
wrench
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a wrench
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 , jack and spare
tyre
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 from
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car’s
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the car’s
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 trunk.Following that, remove the hub cup to receive
an
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apply
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access to
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wheel
Correct article usage
the wheel
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 nut .After that unscrew the
wheel
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 nut with
help
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the help
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 of
wrench
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a wrench
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, but don't remove it before raising
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car
Correct article usage
the car
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 by using
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the
a
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jack. Afterwards, remove
damaged
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the damaged
a damaged
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wheel
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 from
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car
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the car
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, and install
new
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a new
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tyre
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Then
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, screw all
wheel
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 nuts
by
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in
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 half. Lower the
car
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, and continue tightening until all are tight .
Finally
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 put all instruments and damaged
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tyres
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tyre
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 into
trunk
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the trunk
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 to keep environmental cleanliness and safety on the road.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tyre, wheel, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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