The Contribution of Various Economic Sectors to Xcountry Gross Domestic Product in 2016, 2017 and 2018

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The table illustrates the percentage of
contribution
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of three various economic sectors (
Agriculture
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, Industry, and
Service
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country
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gross domestic product in three different years (2016 , 2017 and 2018).
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, it can be clearly seen that the
service
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sector
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had the highest
contribution
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over the period given,
while
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agriculture
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had the lowest
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.
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, the
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from
agriculture
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and industry increased,
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the
contribution
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from
service
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decreased. With regards to contributions of
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agriculture
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sector
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, it went up from 13% in 2016 and touched the highest point of around 15% in the
last
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year.
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, in the cases of
industry
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sector
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, it rose from 22% in the first year and
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it climaxed to approximately 30% in 2018.
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, the
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of
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service
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the service
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sector
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fluctuated slightly beginning at 65% and dropped by a mere 1% in 2017.
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this
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period, the figure declined to more than a fifth (55%).
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vocabulary
Consider varying the vocabulary more effectively by using synonyms and similar expressions to avoid repetition (e.g., contribution, increase, sector).
coherence cohesion
Provide clearer transitions between paragraphs and ideas to enhance the logical flow.
grammar
Good use of comparative language to describe differences and changes in the economic sectors.
task response
The essay clearly presents the data and gives an overview in the introduction, maintaining a focus on the key trends.

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