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The graph below gives information about the number of people who smoked cigarettes in the UK between 2011 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Aiaru

The graph below gives information about the number of people who smoked cigarettes in the UK between 2011 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Aiaru
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This
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number
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 of tobacco
smokers
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 in the UK during a decade.
overall
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, the
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 of addicted people declined. but
tabacco
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tobacco
 smoker males had
gread
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great
 a majority in millions. As we see ad initium there were slightly
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 4
million
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smokers
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. But after a
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 there were gradually dwindled. Over against to 2021 in 2011
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 nominate greatly upward. It is worth noting that the
number
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 of male
smokers
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 in 2013,2014, 2016,
2017
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and 2017
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 was approximately the same. The
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 of female
smokers
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 peaked at about 3.7
million
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 in 2011 before sharply declining to around 1.9
million
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 in 2012. From 2012 to 2018, it fluctuated between 1.9
million
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 and 1.7
million
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. Over the next three years, it steadily decreased, reaching its lowest point in 2021.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, smokers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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