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5. You are leaving your job and would like to invite your friend to replace you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: -describe the job -explain the reason you are leaving -tell him/her why you would recommend the job to them

#job #friend #-describe #-explain #reason #-tell
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Dear Maninder, I hope
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 letter finds you in the best of spirits and radiant health. I am writing
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 letter to let you know that I am resigning from my current job and I would like you to replace me. I have been working in Dell International, as a software developer. Primarily, my job is to develop new
softwares
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software
 and check them, in order to, find any technical
glitch
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 before sending them for
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 trials. I have been working
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 post for the
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 five years. I like my job a lot but currently, I am going through a rough phase in
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 life. Actually, my mother suffered a Heart Attack two months ago, and she is still in her recovery phase. Being the only child of my parents there is no one to take care of her
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 me.
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, because of her illness, I am unable to concentrate on my work.
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, I have decided to leave my office and look after her. You
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 known
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me
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long period of time now, and I know how good and sincere you are in your professional life.
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, you always wanted to work in
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 MNC like
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.
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, keeping all these things in
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mind, I think you are an ideal candidate for
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 post. I urge you to kindly think about
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 offer and get back to me. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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task achievement
Consider briefly elaborating more on the benefits or challenges of the job to give a fuller picture to your friend.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph maintains a single focus or idea, which you did well here. Continue practicing this skill for clarity.
task achievement
The letter covers all the required points, including a job description, reason for leaving, and recommendation to a friend effectively.
coherence cohesion
Well-organized thoughts with each paragraph containing a single idea which contributes to readability.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
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