The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate who did not go to into full time work did after leaving a college in 2008

The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate who did not go to into full time work did after leaving a college in 2008
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The given bar charts illustrate the trends of activities after college from two different groups, which are graduates and postgraduates in the UK in 2008.
Overall
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, it is apparent that the individuals who continue studying are relatively higher in both categories,
while
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voluntary work is the opposite with the smallest figure. The proposition of graduates who are opting to study is close to 30,000, which makes it the biggest proposition among all activities.
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, graduates becoming part-time jobs and unemployment are nearly the same with only 17,735 and 16,235, respectively, creating a moderate difference between them.
In contrast
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, voluntary work has the lowest number with 3,500 people, which is roughly eight times smaller compared to the
further
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study group.
Similarly
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, the postgraduates hold the greatest number in a
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study group with 2,725 people, which is followed by part-time work with 2,535 students.
Otherwise
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, the unemployment is comparatively lower with only 1,625,
although
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it still holds the third position and the voluntary sector appears to be the least popular with 345 people.
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