Some school leavers choose to travel or work for a year before going to university. What might me the reason for this? What are the advantages or this practice?

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I am going to explain why it is better to take a
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after finishing high school to
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travel
or
work
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before going to university.
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, if we take a
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year
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we will have the opportunity to
work
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and travel around the world and get to know as many
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, cultures and people as we can.
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two things could give us experiences that we might never have if we do not take a
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.
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, if you do an
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internship
in the future it could help you with the knowledge required to apply for a job.
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, It is not rare that school leavers do not know what to study after graduating. At the age of
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almost anyone is sure of what they want to do in the future, it is not
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easy
to say I want to study
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there.
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, in my personal
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it took me three years to decide which studies I
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to do. And
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, if you do not take a
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year
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after leaving high school, it is very
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possible
that you will not be able to do it in another opportunity, because you will be in university and
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you will have to
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or form a family.
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, there is a downfall, if you take a
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year
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will be late at least one
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and the ones from your generation will not. In conclusion, taking a
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to travel or to do an
intership
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internship
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will give you the
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to live some experiences that you might never have, and even though you will be late with your studies that does not win over
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all the arguments in
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of taking a
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year
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • school leavers
  • real-world experience
  • academic environment
  • personal interests
  • future studies
  • essential life skills
  • independence
  • time management
  • adaptability
  • learn new languages
  • diverse cultures
  • global awareness
  • financial benefits
  • earning money
  • student loans
  • family support
  • emotional and mental health benefits
  • academic pressures
  • burnout
  • increasing motivation
  • networking opportunities
  • personal growth
  • maturity
  • future career prospects
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