Scientists predict that cars will be driven by computers, not people in the near future. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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technology it will be beneficial to those people who cannot
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drivin by computer will save
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money which they pay to the drivers and will not need to rely on someone. As a
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human life
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Work on improving grammatical accuracy and choose more precise vocabulary. This will help in clearly communicating your ideas.
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Although you've mentioned some advantages, consider addressing potential disadvantages or counterpoints for a more balanced perspective.
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Develop your ideas further by providing more specific examples and explanations. This will help illustrate your points better.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states your position on the topic, which forms a good foundation for the essay.
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You have identified two clear benefits of computer-driven cars, which aligns with the task and shows task engagement.
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The essay includes a logical progression of ideas, maintaining relevance to the topic throughout.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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