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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent
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The graph illustrates the
number
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 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017, divided into three categories: those staying on
cruise
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 ships, those staying on the
island
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, and the total
number
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 of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, the Caribbean
island
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 experienced a consistent rise in tourist numbers over the period, primarily driven by a dramatic increase in
cruise
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ship
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visitors
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,
whereas
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 those staying on the
island
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 exhibited a steadier growth pattern followed by a slight decline in the later years.
To begin
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 with, the
number
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 of
cruise
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ship
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visitors
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 started at just under 1
million
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 in 2010 and remained stable for one year.
Subsequently
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, it experienced rapid growth, peaking at 1.5
million
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 in 2013 and remained unchanged until 2015.
However
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, there was a small dip in 2016, falling to approximately 1.25
million
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. Eventually,
cruise
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ship
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visitors
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 rebounded, settling at 1.5
million
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 in 2017.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 showed more growth. From 2010 to 2012, their numbers hovered at just under 0.5
million
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.
Afterward
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, there was a steady rise, reaching 1.5
million
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 in 2016, overtaking the
number
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 of
cruise
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ship
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visitors
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.
Finally
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, in the
last
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 year, it reached the highest point at 2
million
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 guests.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, cruise, visitors, ship, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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