The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the graph provided reveals the population of individuals who participate
for
various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over a period of 20 years, from 2000 to 2020.
Change preposition
in
Overall
, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that by far the highest growth was related to the trend of table tennis from 2000 to 2020. In stark contrast, the Linking Words
significant
decrease Correct article usage
a significant
of
the rate of participants Change preposition
in
belonged
to amateur dramatics from 2000 to 2020.
Wrong verb form
belonging
According to
what is shown, the ratio of people who attended film Linking Words
club
Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
as well as
martial arts did not change dramatically over 20 years. Linking Words
In addition
, the numbers of participants for amateur dramatics and Linking Words
also
table tennis did not have any changes until 2010 but those of participants fluctuated significantly from 2010 to 2020.
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Moreover
, it is Linking Words
also
interesting to note that the portion of individuals for musical performances enhanced from 2005 to 2020.Linking Words
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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