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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same periods. Summarise the informatio by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant. Write at least 150 words

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same periods. Summarise the informatio by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant. Write at least 150 words
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The data compares the total number of
people
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 who visited to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished,
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, it details the levels of satisfaction between the visitors in the same period.
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, there was an increase in the total sum of visitors to Ashdown Museum after refurbishment, in the same way, there was a meaningful growth in the percentage of
people
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 who felt very satisfied with the place
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 and a sharp decrease in those who felt dissatisfied. Before the refurbishment, the results of the survey show that half of the
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 were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied, only 15 per cent were very satisfied and 30 per cent were satisfied. After refurbishment, the count of visitors rose approximately 20000
people
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, and those who were very satisfied reached 35% and satisfied 30%. In the meantime, the total of
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 dissatisfied decreased from 40% to 15% but there was a slight increase in those who were very dissatisfied
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reaching 15%. In both periods, the count of
people
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 who did not respond was the same as 5%.
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