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Tarnagul is a small town near Melbourne. The maps show the town's development over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Tarnagul is a small town near Melbourne. The maps show the town's development over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate a small
town
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 close to Melbourne called Tarnagul and how it developed over three different years 1900, 1950 and 2000.
Overall
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, Tarnagul is a tiny
town
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 has a river on the western
side
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 of the
town
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 and a main road across the
town
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 from the West to the East.
However
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, over the period, the
town
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 was completely transformed with the addition of some commercial buildings, a park, farms and a new
side
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 road.
Firstly
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, a dairy farm converted totally into a lemon and grapefruit farm which expanded the
area
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 in 1950, before it transformed again into a wildlife sanctuary in 2000. A
town
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area
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 had nearly doubled that located in the centre of Tarnagul before the
area
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 of the
town
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 decreased significantly in 2000.
However
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, a Mandarin field in the south
area
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 of the
town
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 became an orange field in 1950. All the orange fields had been unused any more in 2000.
Secondly
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, the most noticeable addition
on
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in
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 the western part of the
town
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Add a missing verb
is a
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a
Correct article usage
the
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 new three buildings constructed and one of them on the left
side
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 was used for parking sheds in 1950, before it was transformed into a local museum and the other one on the right
side
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 of the
town
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 was a craft market and a smallest one in the south
side
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 of
town
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 used for a tourist shop in 2000.
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, between the local museum and the craft market, there was a
side
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 street
which
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in which
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 was all tracks banned in 2000, that
side
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 road was built in 1950 and was used by all kinds of vehicles.
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, a new park was set up in the southern part of the
town
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, side, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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