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The pie charts and table present information on percentage of imported seafood the UK from three nations and total values of sea food.

The pie charts and table present information on percentage of imported seafood the UK from three nations and total values of sea food.
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 pie charts illustrate information on the percentage of imported
seafoodfood
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seafood food
 to the UK from three nations( Poland, Sweden, and Germany) in three different years (1987, 1997 and 2007),
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 the table depicts the total value of
seafood
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 in the same three years (units are measured in
million
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dollars
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),
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, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of imported
seafood
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 in Poland decreased,
whereasin
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whereas in
whereas
 Sweden and Germany, it increased.
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, it is obvious that the total value of imported
seafood
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 rose less than double . With regards to the percentage of imported
seafood
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 in Poland , it dropped significantly from about 65% in 1987 to almost 30% in the
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 year.
In contrast
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 , when it comes to Sweden, the figure increased from 28% in the first to the highest point at around 43% in 2007.
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, the rate of importation rose in Germany starting at approximately 7% and
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 at 27% in the final year.
On the other hand
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, in 1987, the total value was 7.40
million
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dollars
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 and it went up in the second year to nearly 9.10
million
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dollars
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 before touching the highest point in 2007 which was 12.90
million
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dollars
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seafood, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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