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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Rũng

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Rũng
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The chart gives
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information
infomation
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information
 about the expenditures on consumer goods in France and
UK
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, Cars
was
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 the most popular in
a
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both
nation
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nations
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. In France, Camera invested the lowest thousands of
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pound
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pounds
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. And
UK
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 lowest pay attention to
perfume
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 of the money
spend
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. In terms of the higher values, Cars had the highest spending in
British
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 and
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Franch
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France
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. To be more specific, the former dominated at 450
thousand
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of
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pound
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pounds
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,
while
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 the latter was 450
thousand
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of
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pound
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pounds
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. In the chart Computers, it had a consumption of about 360 and 300
thousand
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of
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pound
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pounds
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 respectively
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Franch
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French
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 and
British
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. Regarding Books,
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Franch
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France
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 had a
out going
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outgoing
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costs
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cost
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 of 300
thousand
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of
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the pound
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pound
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pounds
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 and
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is
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spent
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 more than 100
thousand
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. For Perfumes,
British
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 has the lowest number of
consumer
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consumers
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 approximately 150
thousand
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of
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apply
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pound
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pounds
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,
while
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Franch
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France
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lower
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is lower
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 than
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British
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of
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by
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 about 200
thousand
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of
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pound
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pounds
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. To be more specific, the former stood at 150
thousand
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of
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pound
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pounds
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,
whereas
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 the latter was 350
thousand
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of
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pound
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pound, british, franch, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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