The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. (rewriteja)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. (rewriteja)
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This
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bar chart shows a comparison in the percentage of care time that parents take for their children in the evening in four tasks ( dressing, homework, playing games and preparing for bed) in 2022.
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, it can be clearly seen
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of comparison that
mothers
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spent the highest on dressing,
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fathers
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spent the lowest on all tasks . Looking in more detail,
mothers
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prefer to dress for their children more than
fathers
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.
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,
mothers
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spent over 70% and
fathers
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about only 1% which was the least. Another point is that on preparing for bed
mothers
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spend less than
fathers
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.
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, the percentage of
mothers
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were
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above 20% and approximately 5% for
fathers
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. A final point to be mentioned is that both parents spent more time preparing for bed at exactly 70%,
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they spent less time on homework at just under 40% per cent. One notable point is that
fathers
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had an equal percentage of playing games and preparing for bed which was around 3%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mothers, fathers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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