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It is becoming increasingly popular for people to tourist destinations during public holidays. What problems does this causes? What solutions are these to this problems.

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Most
people
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 spend their holidays abroad nowadays. There are significant issues
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that comes
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comes
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come
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 from tourism, which
are
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is
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 crowds and
populltion
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population
, to approach them the government should limit the
number
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 of visitors.
To begin
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with
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 problems, since all countries in the world have the same months of public holidays throughout the year, all
people
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 head to
tourist
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destenation
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destination
destinations
 at the same time
consequenctly
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consequently
 harm for these countries. To mention the harms, crowded places
comes
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come
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 as
primary
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the primary
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 issue, followed by long lines of waiting in every place, making the
experiencs
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experience
experiences
 less
anjoying
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annoying
enjoying
.
Second,
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the countries will face
environment's
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environment
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 pollution.
Receident
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The residents
 will suffer from all these
problem
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problems
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 alone after
tourist
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 back to their homes. Some steps can
definatly
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definitely
 be taken to tackle the problems,
first,
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the change must start with
government
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the government
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, who should be persuaded that the huge
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 damage the country rather than
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 it. During the peak season , they should determine a specific
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 that not only cities
accommodating
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accommodate
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it
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apply
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but
also
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reasturants
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restaurants
, transportation and outdoor places like beaches or international parks. One supporter could be booking applications that demonstrate the specific
number
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 to show
people
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 the booked seats and how
much
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many
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 seats
left
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are left
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. In conclusion, the
number
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 of
people
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 who use their
vecation
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vacation
 for travelling will continue increasing unless the governments do some
limites
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limits
in
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on
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 the
number
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 of
sightseer
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sightseers
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 to protect their
contries
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countries
.

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