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Band 5.5

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Apologize for your absence and explain the reasoning Explain why you had to be at the other event Explain what you will do to catch up Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Mr. Andrew, I am writing
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in regards
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regards
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regard
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 to my absence
last
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 week, in our team meetings and office hours work.
Firstly
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, I just want to apologize for not being there
due
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for some reason. For the reason of, that my great Uncle was hospitalized
due to
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 his breathing and other
illness
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illnesses
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.
And all
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All
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 of family relatives should be there, to give her care and support for
the
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a
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 fast recovery.
Therefore
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, because of his
age
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age,
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 he stayed longer at the hospital for several days. Luckily after a week, he's been discharged and his health is getting better.
Apart from
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this
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, I contacted my Team leader John, and we discussed how I can catch up to all the missed meetings and days that I'm not there. I'm willing to do my best to work in my team confidently as soon as I come back to the office. Thank you for your understanding,
Sincerly
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Sincerely
, Becky
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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly conveys a single idea, and organize the letter to enhance clarity and flow.
Task Response
Provide a clear and concise explanation for your absence, avoiding unnecessary repetition and confusion.
Task Response
The letter maintains a suitable and respectful tone for a professional context.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal, fitting the context of a letter to a manager.
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