The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The two pie
chart
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charts
presents
how Correct subject-verb agreement
present
energy
is used in Use synonyms
an
general household and the greenhouse gas emissions in Australia respectively.
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among
energy
used in Australia, heating Use synonyms
energy
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most
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emission
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emissions
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were
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On
contrary
, the proportion of refrigeration Correct article usage
the contrary
energy
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that
spent in the household was low, but the Correct pronoun usage
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emission
that they were making was double times big.
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most
highest Change the adjective
apply
energy
that Australian Use synonyms
household
use was heating, which was 42% followed by water heating less than about 10%. Other Fix the agreement mistake
households
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appliances
was
used 15% and refrigeration and cooling and lighting Change the verb form
were
energy
was spent less than 10%, which was 7%, 4% and 2% each.
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energy
the greenhouse gas Add a comma
energy,
emission
was very little. It was not even half of the Use synonyms
energy
that heating made. In Use synonyms
case
of Water heating the Correct article usage
the case
emission
that it made was approximately Use synonyms
same
proportion as the Correct article usage
the same
energy
it made, which was 32%. In opposite, Use synonyms
rest
of the Correct article usage
the rest
energy
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such
as Other appliances and refrigeration and cooling and lighting Linking Words
energy
made more Use synonyms
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emission
than they were spent by Australians.Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
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