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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The table illustrates the total
of
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expenditure in four sources namely
National
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the National
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 Government, local Taxes ,and other sources between 2017 and 2018 ,and the
budget
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are
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 measured in units of
million
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 pounds.
Similarly
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to
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the pie chart shows
in
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how the money was expended between 2017 and 2018 in three different kind of fields namely Salaries (officers and staff) , Technology ,and Building and transportation.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the total
of
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spending in
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budget
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the budget
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 in 2018 was more than in 2017.
According to
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 the pie graph in
both
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years
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years,
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 the Salaries
in
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of
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 officers and staff
was
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were
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 the highest sector than
other
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in other
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 fields.
To begin
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, with
according to
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 the table the total
of
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budget
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 in 2018 was more than in 2017 which
was
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accounted
to
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for
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the
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318.8
million
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 pounds.
According to
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 the national government was the largest
spent
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spending
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 in
both
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years
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comprised
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with 175.5
million
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 in 2017 and a mere increase
with
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 1,5
million
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 to
the
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177.6m.
On the other hand
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, the other sources
was
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had
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 the least number of
budget
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 around 38m in 2017 and 38.5m in 2018.
According to
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 the pie
chart
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chart,
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 the Salaries in
both
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years
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was
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were
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 the major sector around 75% in 2017 and a slight decline
2018
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in 2018
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 around 69%. The most interesting
noticed
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thing is
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 that the Building and transportation
was
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had
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 the same amount of spending in
both
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years
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accounted
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accounting
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with
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for
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 17
percentage
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per cent
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. Technology witnessed a dramatic decline in 2017 and 2018 around 14% to
the
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8% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million, both, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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