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Nowadays the media should include more good news in their publications. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today’s world, positive
news
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 should increasingly be included by the
media
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. I totally agree with
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 statement because good
news
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 not only helps
people
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’s feelings bright and have optimistic views, but
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 could be an excellent example of being a useful person in
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society. Having frequent good
news
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 any
media
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 platform could encourage and create
people
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’s happiness. Many Science research
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 found that endorphins can be increased when
people
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 are satisfied with positive circumstances.
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, useful
news
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 can lead to better outcomes for some
people
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.
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, presentations of successful students in universities and publications of their research results could motivate others to participate in studying at higher levels and try to accomplish their goals the same as
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, reporting many glad tidings perhaps contributes to a great model for
people
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. I have heard the
news
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 about a taxi driver correcting customers' belongings in the car and trying to return them back to the owner. Most
people
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 admire him and after
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 there is a lot of
news
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 about finding and returning the lost items to
people
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. It can be seen that presenting good
news
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 in the
media
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 has an impact on
people
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's
behavior
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 as they are learning to act the same as a person who was published by the
media
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. In conclusion, I deeply believe that publishing frequently positive information can lead to a better outcome for society because
people
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 are happier when they receive
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 information. On top of that they tend to continue the same process of being a good person from the
news
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.
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Ensure all ideas and examples are fully developed and linked to the main topic.
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You have clearly stated your position in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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