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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A line graph indicates different
type
Fix the agreement mistake
types
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 of energy
source
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sources
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such
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 as petrol and oil, coal, natural gas, nuclear, solar and wind,
hydropower
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and hydropower
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 which were
consumption
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consumed
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 from 1980 to 2030.
Overall
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, nuclear, solar and wind, hydropower started with
same
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the same
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 outlay over the
period
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 and
this
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 indicator spreads with almost the same cost towards the end of the
period
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.
Also
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, coal and natural gas spread
it
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in
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 rows with little difference. Petrol and oil are most commonly spread by quadrillion units during 1980-2030.
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with
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with,
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 at the start of
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period
Add an article
the period
a period
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, petrol and oil
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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most
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the most
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 popular
which
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apply
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began
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35
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at 35
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 quadrillion units.
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 it reduced
5
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by 5
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point
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 and it was the lowest indicator.
Then
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 the figure started to increase and it will rise
its
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to its
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 maximum in 2030. Coal and gas are reflected in close numbers
at the end
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 of the
period
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 as they start with close numbers, and
at
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on
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 some
dates
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dates,
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 their expenditures are the same. Nuclear, solar and wind, hydropower follow similar trends starting from just only belove 5,
it
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and it
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 is projected that
this
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 will steadily grow.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • biofuels
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • trends
  • increases/decreases
  • shifts
  • milestones
  • significant
  • forecast
  • implications
  • sustainable development
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