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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts global
sales
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 figures for the most renowned mobile phone brands—Samsung, Apple,
Nokia
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, LG, and ZTE—over the period from 2009 to 2013.
Overall
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, Samsung, Apple, and ZTE saw their
sales
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 increase during
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 time,
whereas
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sales
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 for
Nokia
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 and LG experienced declines. Notably,
Nokia
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, the leading brand in 2009 and 2011, was surpassed by Samsung in 2013. In 2009, Apple sold the fewest
units
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, with
sales
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 falling short of 50
million
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.
However
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,
this
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 figure rose steadily, reaching approximately 150
million
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units
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 by 2013. Meanwhile, ZTE's
sales
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 remained relatively stable, staying below 100
million
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units
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 across 2009, 2011, and 2013, with only slight variations. LG,
on the other hand
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, saw its
sales
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 drop from over 100
million
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units
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 in 2009 to nearly 80
million
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units
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 in 2013. Samsung's
sales
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 exhibited consistent growth, rising from around 230
million
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units
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 in 2009 to nearly 450
million
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 in 2013.
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,
Nokia
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 experienced a sharp decline in
sales
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, falling from more than 400
million
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units
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 in 2009 to about 250
million
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units
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 by 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, nokia, units, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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