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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the distribution rate of 5 major mobile phone companies, surveyed over the period of 5 years.
Overall
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, in spite of the fact that the initial predominant belonged to Nokia, later on, it was deposed by Samsung. In 2009, Apple sold the fewest
units
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, with
sales
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 falling short of 50
million
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.
However
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,
this
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 figure rose steadily, reaching approximately 150
million
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units
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 by 2013. Meanwhile, ZTE's
sales
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 remained relatively stable, staying below 100
million
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units
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 across 2009, 2011, and 2013, with only slight variations. LG,
on the other hand
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, saw its
sales
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 drop from over 100
million
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units
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 in 2009 to nearly 80
million
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units
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 in 2013. Samsung's
sales
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 exhibited consistent growth, rising from around 230
million
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units
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 in 2009 to nearly 450
million
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 in 2013.
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, Nokia experienced a sharp decline in
sales
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, falling from more than 400
million
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units
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 in 2009 to about 250
million
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units
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 by 2013.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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