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Some people think that schools should choose students according to their academic abilities, while others think it is better to have students of different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion?

#people #schools #students #abilities
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 capabilities of youths they should work together so that
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 learn from them.
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 whether academic institutions should have the option to select a student as per their academic qualifications.
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 some other people opine with
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 as per them having different abilities of students is better. In
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 both arguments will be discussed before introducing my opinion
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 capabilities child.
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school
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 should bring youth having the same qualities so that they can develop
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career
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, there are various separate classes to teach for those who
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 to be a doctor, engineers,
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 on.
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: medical institutions always seek the admission of those students who have already studied science and have
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knowledge related to
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 field.
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 who should be responsible
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 their college as per their different abilities as
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general
Make sure to structure your essay with clear paragraphs. Start with an introduction that outlines both sides of the argument and ends with your thesis statement. Follow with paragraphs for each view and conclude with your opinion.
task response
Develop your ideas further. Explain why having students with similar abilities might be beneficial or detrimental to their learning.
task response
Provide specific examples to illustrate your points about the benefits or drawbacks of grouping students by ability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and use linking words to show relationships between ideas. This will improve cohesion and coherence.
task response
Attempt to illustrate both views before providing your own opinion is commendable, showing an understanding of the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows awareness of different educational practices, which adds depth to your discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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