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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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The bar chart illustrates the daily consumption of fruits and vegetables in five portions in the UK between 2001 and 2008, which is divided by gender.
Overall
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, all the trends in all categories fluctuated in the period given with
women
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 generally eating more and collectively having the highest proportion until the final year,
while
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 men and
children
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 were consistently lower in number. The proportion of
women
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 peaked in 2006 at over 30%, placing it as the greatest percentage.
Likewise
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, men and
children
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groups
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also
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 hit the biggest number in 2006 with approximately 25% and 20%, respectively.
However
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, all
groups
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 experienced a decrease gradually until 2008, but the
women
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 category still held a higher rate with close to 30%. The percentage of men's and
children
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's consumption remained stable from 2001 to 2003, which were slightly above 15% and 10%, respectively. Those
groups
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 continuously rose until 2006.
By contrast
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, the
women
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 group started at 20% and considerably escalated until 2006.
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, there was a dramatic difference between
women
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 and
children
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groups
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 in 2004, which was over 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, children, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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