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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the productions and consumption of electiricy in 2014. Summarise the infromation by seleting and reporting the main features and make comparisonn whete relevant

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the productions and consumption of electiricy in 2014. Summarise the infromation by seleting and reporting the main features and make comparisonn whete relevant
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China is the
world
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world's
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 largest
produser
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producer
 of
electric
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electricity
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 city,generating 5.398 KWH,and
china
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China
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 uses 5,322 KWH each year,so
its
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it is
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 the
large
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largest
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 consumer global,
betwen
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between
 country like
US
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the US
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 just
consume
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consumes
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 3.866 for production
4.099
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of 4.099
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,which is significantly less than China's output but still a substantial figure,and for the other country like : Russia
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produced
produc
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produces
 1.057
consum
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 1.038 Japan
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produc
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product
produced
 936.2
consum
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 856.7 India
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produc
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produces
 871
consum
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 698.8 Canada
produc
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 618.9
consum
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 499.9 France
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produc
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product
 561.2
consum
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 462.9 Brazil
produc
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 530.7
consum
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 455.8 Germany
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produc
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produced
 526.6
consum
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 582.5 Korea Rep
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produc
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product
 485.1
consum
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 449.5 So in
this
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information
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 Korea its low product and
consume
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consumption
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for
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of
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electric
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electricity
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 in 2014
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words produc, consum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the ninth paragraph.
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