*Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. *Why might this be the case? *What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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There is no denying the fact that many men and women wanted to work for their own projects, rather than working for others.
this
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essay will talk about why
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people
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want to establish their own
project
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projects
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and
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it and what are the negative effects
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being self-employed.
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with, some
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consider that working for their own
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will make them
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on their project more.
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, many of them believe that when you work for your own
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you might be
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successful
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you
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putting so much effort
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it. so it can be a
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successful
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one day and you make lots of income from it meaning you consider
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yourself
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as a business man which is a dream for some
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. In terms of the negative side effect
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being self-employed, it takes lots of time and effort rather than just getting paid
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someone else
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if we see it from
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way when the plans do not go as
people
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wish their own
company
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will fall down which led some projects to be
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cancelled
. and now they are poor
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dangerous step.
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, in 1998 a man from
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called Juan
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decided to leave his job even though his salary was great.
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, he established his own paper
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called Dunder
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Mifflin
and suddenly after 2 years of hard work he closed his
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because there was no income
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unfortunatly
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unfortunately
he could not achieve his goal.
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until
he died in 2000 from
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depression
. In conclusion, there are
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of
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humans
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choose
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to be self-employed and
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lots of profits and it is
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true that there are many
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consequences
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being self-employed.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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