The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
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The column chart shows the proportion of Australian
people
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's desires and habits to buy and drink tea and
coffee
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in five different cities during the
last
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month.
overall
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, the figure for
people
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who went to a cafe for
coffee
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or tea was higher than two other groups in all cities except for Adelaide's citizens.
In addition
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, the percentage of individuals who bought fresh
coffee
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was the lowest among other groups in all places in the
last
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four weeks. The proportion of fresh
coffee
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buyers in Brisbane was the lowest (about 34%),
conversely
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, that of Sydney was the highest among these five cities (about 43%).
Moreover
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, fresh
coffee
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had the least purchasers in total in the
last
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month. The figure for instant
coffee
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consumers in these five
urbans
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urban
was roughly near to each other. The percentages for Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart fluctuated between 45% to 55% at
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time. The proportion of
people
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who went to a cafe for
coffee
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or tea in Melbourne was the largest at well under 65%, and after that, the
people
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from Hobart and Sydney's citizens were respectively, second and third most consumers at 63% and 61%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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