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Some people believe that we cannot learn any thin form the past for our life today , while other believe our history is valuable source of out information to understand human’s life. Discuss both point view and give your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that everyone has a different memory since they were born, and it will affect you.
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 it’s commonly held belief that the main reason to form your personality, there is
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 an argument you might remember it only but doesn’t impact you.
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 essay will analyze
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On the one hand, research issued from Harvard University in 1999 has proven that childhood history impacts
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, we have been learning from our records.
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, you may be reacting as an adult based on a situation that happened to you.
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, we don’t have the same life,
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, some people had a peaceful growing up without challenges.
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, on their side will see those stories are ridiculous and you need to progress. It’s
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 possible to say that, despite having a hard life, you are supposed to forget it and move on through your life to have a better version. In conclusion, there are no easy no answers to
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 question, on balance,
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, I tend to believe that I agree partly with both of them, surely learn from my past but at the same time, I have to develop myself as I had learned from mistakes and healing from what I faced
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coherence cohesion
Try to make your essay clearer by connecting your sentences and ideas more smoothly. This can be achieved by using linking words and phrases, like 'however,' 'moreover,' 'therefore,' etc., to show the relationship between different parts of your argument.
task achievement
Ensure that your response addresses all aspects of the task. For this topic, consider discussing more specific examples of how history has or hasn't impacted modern life.
task achievement
Develop more comprehensive and clearer ideas by expanding on the points you make. For instance, when discussing the impact of childhood history, give specific examples or situations.
coherence cohesion
You have structured your essay with a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
You demonstrate an understanding of the task by addressing both viewpoints of the argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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