The map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now.

The map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now.
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The displayed map depicts a
park
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and its changes between 1980 and the current
time
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.
 As an overview, the
park
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has dramatically changed over the given period of
time
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. In 1980, there were two gates, the first located on the left side of the
park
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, and
while
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second
in
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the lower side of the map. Both on the left and right sides of the lower gates
,
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are situated flowers,
while
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at the top of the
park
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, there are trees.
However
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, at the current
time
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, the main change is that gates and road have been replaced by
path
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a path
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,
beside
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that, at the right top of the
park
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, chairs, desks and a barbecue appeared.
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at the left side, there is one more branch. At the same
time
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, at the bottom two flower gardens were replaced by bushes and
playground
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playgrounds
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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