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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the
expenditure
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 on consumer goods in
France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010, measured in pounds sterling. Five categories of goods are compared: cars, computers, books, perfume, and cameras.
Overall
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, the
UK
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 spent more on consumer goods than
France
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, particularly on cars, books, and cameras.
However
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,
France
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 outspent the
UK
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 on perfume. Spending on computers was nearly equal in both countries. In detail, the
UK
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 spent approximately £450,000 on cars, making it the category with the highest
expenditure
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 in both countries.
France
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 followed closely, with just over £400,000 spent.
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, books were a significant
expenditure
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 in the
UK
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, reaching around £400,000, compared to
France
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’s lower but notable figure of about £300,000. Cameras
also
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 showed a stark difference, with the
UK
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 allocating £350,000, nearly double
France
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's
expenditure
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 of £150,000.
On the other hand
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,
France
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 showed a clear preference for perfume, spending about £200,000 compared to the
UK
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’s £150,000. The only category with similar spending was computers, where both countries spent approximately £350,000, indicating a shared priority for
this
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 technology.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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