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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivls;during festival periods,people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #festivls #periods
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The bar chart compares the number of
hours
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 teachers spent teaching annually in primary, lower secondary, and upper secondary
schools
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 across four
countries-namely
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countries
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 the United States,
Iceland
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,
Japan
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, and Spain-in 2001.
Overall
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, the United States had the highest teaching
hours
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 across all school levels,
while
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Japan
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 recorded the lowest.
Iceland
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 and Spain showed moderate figures, with
Iceland
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 generally ranking higher than Spain. Notably, teaching
hours
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 increased with the education level in all countries, except
Japan
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, where the figures remained relatively stable. In the United States, teachers in upper secondary
schools
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 worked the most, with approximately 1,200
hours
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 annually, significantly higher than those in lower secondary (around 1,000
hours
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) and primary
schools
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 (approximately 900
hours
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).
Iceland
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 exhibited a similar trend, with teaching
hours
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 ranging from about 600 in primary education to 900 in upper secondary.
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Japan
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 showed the least variation, with teachers spending roughly 600
hours
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 across all school levels.
Similarly
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, Spain had relatively low figures, with teaching
hours
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 increasing slightly from around 600 in primary
schools
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 to just under 900 in upper secondary education. In summary, the chart highlights substantial differences in teaching loads across countries, reflecting varied priorities and approaches in educational systems.
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