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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course.
Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school.
• describe what you enjoyed about the course
• say how much cooking you’ve done since the course
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well. The purpose of writing
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 letter is to provide you
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 regarding a short cookery course, which I did at your institute. First and foremost, the facility has well-known instructors that can help students to improve their practical skills.
Besides
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, I
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 enjoyed in-class interactive assignments, which helped me a lot to gain more experience in cooking. After completing a cookery course, I started to help my mother
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prepare meals for our family and
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 that, my mother feels proud of me. Fortunately, during my holidays, I
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 started a small tiffin service for students.
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, I would like to suggest you start a baking course. As in the present time, youngsters are more interested towards baking cookies, cakes and many more. Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope my provided suggestion will help you. Yours faithfully,

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Make sure to address the recipient correctly. If their name is known, use it instead of 'Sir/Madam'.
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Consider expanding more on how the course influenced your cooking post-completion.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow of the letter.
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The letter effectively uses a formal tone appropriate for addressing a course director.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph discusses a distinct point, contributing to clarity and organization.
coherence and cohesion
The letter opens and closes with appropriate salutations and sign-offs.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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