You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. • describe what you enjoyed about the course • say how much cooking you’ve done since the course • suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well. The purpose of writing

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regarding a short cookery course, which I did at your institute. First and foremost, the facility has well-known instructors that can help students to improve their practical skills.

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enjoyed in-class interactive assignments, which helped me a lot to gain more experience in cooking. After completing a cookery course, I started to help my mother

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prepare meals for our family and

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that, my mother feels proud of me. Fortunately, during my holidays, I

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started a small tiffin service for students.

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, I would like to suggest you start a baking course. As in the present time, youngsters are more interested towards baking cookies, cakes and many more. Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope my provided suggestion will help you. Yours faithfully,

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Make sure to address the recipient correctly. If their name is known, use it instead of 'Sir/Madam'.

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Consider expanding more on how the course influenced your cooking post-completion.

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Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow of the letter.

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The letter effectively uses a formal tone appropriate for addressing a course director.

coherence and cohesion

Each paragraph discusses a distinct point, contributing to clarity and organization.

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The letter opens and closes with appropriate salutations and sign-offs.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

150 words

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