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The graph provides intormation on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007

The graph provides intormation on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007
The line graph illustrates how many
students
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 from the US, UK and
Australia
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who
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apply
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studied in
the
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apply
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foreign countries from 2002 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be inferred from the graph that, the number of
students
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 from
US
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the US
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 and
Australia
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 fluctuated over the given period,
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however
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 the figures at the beginning and end were almost the same. In 2002, the number of
students
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 from the US was the highest, at probably 50,000, followed by
UK
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the UK
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 with 40,000 and
Australia
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 at 10,000.
Students
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 from
US
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the US
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 decreased slightly from 50,000 to 48,000 between 2002 and 2004, but they increased again in the following three years from 48,000 to 50,000
again
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apply
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. It can be said that the same situation has been observed with
students
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 from
Australia
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 as well, with their number changing by approximately only 100
students
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. In complete contrast
the
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to the
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 mentioned countries, the
amount
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number
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 of
students
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 from
UK
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the UK
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 remained stable over a year and
then
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 it dropped from 30,000 to 20,000 in 2003-2007.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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