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SECOND--The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

SECOND--The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the total output of films in five different countries from 2007 to 2009.
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, it can be seen that Country A consistently led in film production, followed by Country B. Meanwhile, the other three countries produced significantly fewer films within a similar range. Starting at around four-fifths of the total movie production in Country A across 2007 and 2008, its figure declined slightly to 75 titles in 2009. During the same period,
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 the number of movies produced by Nation B remained stable in the first two years, settling at 50 titles, it
then
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 rose significantly to nearly 75 by 2009.
On the other hand
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, the remaining three nations pictures released fewer
that
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than
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 25.
However
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, the total
numbers
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number
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 of motion pictures released by Nation C increased steadily each year, rising from about 10 in 2007 to just under 25 in 2009.
In contrast
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, Region D experienced fluctuations,
while
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 Region E's work remained relatively stable over the years.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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