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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates the
proportion
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 of
exportations
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exports
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 from Australia to
Japan
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,
US
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the US
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, China and
India
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 between 1990 and 2012.
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, the figure for exports to
India
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 was the lowest among other countries between 1990 and 2012,
that
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and that
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 of
Japan
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 was the highest from 1990 to well before 2010. In 1990,
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of China and
India
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 were roughly equal at well over 1%. The figure for
US
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the US
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 was about 11% and that of
Japan
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 was the highest at nearly 26% at
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 time. Between 1990 and 2000 the
proportion
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 of
India
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 remained constant at about 3%, after which it grew minimally to nearly 7% in 2010,
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then
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 there was a slight decrease to 5% in 2012. In these years that of the US fluctuated between 11% and 5%. In 1990 the highest percentage was for
Japan
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 at 26%,
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 it
droped
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dropped
 marginally by 4% and fell below China in 2007 which rose rapidly between 2005 and 2010 and stood at the highest
proportion
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 at about 27% in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, japan, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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