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Large shopping malls are replacing small shops. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 contemporary era,shopping has become an indispensable part of
everyones
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everyone's
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 life.Big shopping centres are popular in numerous areas.
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,it is replacing some local
shops
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.I
beleive
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believe
 that there are
myraid
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myriad
 benefits in large shopping
complex
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complexes
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instead
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 of enough small stores.In
this
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essay
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 I will elaborate on my views for favouring the positive impact on
commerical
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commercial
 centres and
thus
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,lead to a logical conclusion.
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 with,the major and most prominent reason why the mindset of people has changed from little
shops
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 to shopping
mall
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malls
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 is mainly
due to
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 the
individuals
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individual's
individuals'
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 need to purchase several
items
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from
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under
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 one roof
instead
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 of buying
the
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apply
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things from several
shops
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. It will aid
to save
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in saving
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the
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apply
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time for spending
in
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on
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 other activities.
Along with
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 that,big
shops
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 are providing branded things
with
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of
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 high quality to the customers.
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,all kinds of
items
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 can
use
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be used
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 for a long period of time.
For instance
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,some renowned shopping
mall
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malls
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 like
lullu
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 and
nucleous
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Nucleus
are providing
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provide
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 10 to 20 per cent of
discount
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discounts
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in
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apply
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every summer season.
This
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 will help to attract more people towards the
shops
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.
Additionally
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,
this
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 is highly beneficial for humans to save
the
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apply
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money to some extent. Probing ahead,most of the
items
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likes
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like
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attires
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attire
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,groceries,electronic
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 and so on can easily available
on
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in
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 malls rather than buying
an
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items
an item
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items
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 from single
shops
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.
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,some essential
items
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 cannot able to get from the little stores.So,it
is require
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is required
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 to buy the product from
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the commerical
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commerical
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commercial
 centre as we get all kinds of
items
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.Moving forward,large shopping
centers
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centres
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 are providing job
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 for salesmen.Because
,
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apply
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the
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they
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 are
necessity
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a necessity
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 for selling the products by
sales person
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salesperson
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.
This
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 is
also
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 a benefit to some citizens. In conclusion,
commerical
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commercial
 shopping centres
plays
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play
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 a major role in shopping
due to
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the availabilty
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availabilty
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availability
 of all kinds of
items
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.I believe that citizens can easily purchase the products from the mall rather than going
for
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to
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 different small
shops
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.To some
extent
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extent,
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 it will help to save our time as well money.

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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly supports one main idea and connects to the overall argument. Improving the logical flow and cohesion will enhance the essay's clarity.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and details to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make it more convincing.
introduction conclusion present
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame the argument effectively.
complete response
The essay addresses the task and provides relevant points regarding the advantages of large shopping malls over small stores.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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