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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of the total
population
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 in different 4 countries around the world in 1950, 2002, and projections for 2050.
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, China has the largest
population
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 until 2002
while
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 in the future in 2050
India
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 will have the greatest
number of
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population
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.
In contrast
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,
Japan
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 has the lowest
population
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 of all time and will
also
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 decrease in 2050. As you can see, the largest
population
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 in China in 1950, is about 23
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percent
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per cent
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 of the total of the world. In
India
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, the
percentage
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 is around 15
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percent
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per cent
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. The USA had almost only 7
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percent
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 of the
population
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. But the lowest
percentage
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 of the
population
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 was present in
Japan
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. In 2002, the chart followed the same way, which means that
population
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 distribution
as
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was
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 similar
as
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in1950
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in 1950
. The highest peak of the total
population
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 was in China
then
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India
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 after that USA and later was
Japan
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, they about 20,18,5 and almost 3 respectively. In the future during 2050 as research guesses the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 will significantly decline in 3 countries except
India
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 which would have the highest
population
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 by 18
percent
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 of all
population
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 around the world. People in
Japan
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 tend to have no more children
this
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 is why they still have a lower
percentage
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 of the
population
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 even in the future. The USA has a constant
percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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 in 2002 and even in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, india, japan, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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