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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
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The graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of British citizens
divaded
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divided
 by
age
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 groups that donated money to charity in the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, in 1990 the
percentage
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 of English persons
who had
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aged
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 18-25 was slightly up
of
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by
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 15%; 30% in
does
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apply
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who
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those
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had
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aged
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 26-35, 42 or 43% in the
age
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 group that had 51-65, and does who
had
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were
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 over 65 30%.
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, in 2010 the statistics changed, because now the
percentage
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 in the
age
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 groups is: 18-25, slightly higher than 5%; 26-35, almost 25%; 36-50, 35%; 51-62, 39%; people over 65, 35%.
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, over those years the first three
cluster
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 declined and the
last
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 two increased
its
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their
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percentage
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. After taking all the details into
acount
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account
, we can conclude that in both years the
age
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gorup
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group
 that
have
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has
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 always donated less has between 18-25, and the British
persons
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people
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 that
gived
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gave
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 the most were between 36-50 and 51-65.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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