The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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information about how many
students
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who study abroad register at three specific educational
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.
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, it is noticeable that there are
students
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at
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University
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the University
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of Riverview the most compared with
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the other
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two universities.
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, the highest number of
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comes from India.
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with,
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University
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the University
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of Riverview, Indian
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are at around 7500, and numbers from Nepal and Vietnam record at approximately 5000 and 3800, respectively.
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, the figure for Indonesia and Colombia stand
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least significant
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data
by making up less
1000
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than 1000
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each, meaning that it differs nearly sixfold
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India's data. Regarding
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the remaining information at Smithtown
University
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, about 6000
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who come from India
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the most considerable proportions and the second largest portion is at about 4000, coming from Nepal. Interestingly, Vietnam's data is less about double to Nepal's, which records roughly 2000.
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, the rest statistical
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are the slightest
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mentioned
university
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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