Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believed that having more police on the streets is the best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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faces
challenges Change the verb form
face
due to
criminal activities. Linking Words
Therefore
, some individuals advocate that having enough security Linking Words
personel
on the streets is the most effective method in decreasing and combating Correct your spelling
personnel
crime
. One cannot dispute the fact that police presence on the road can lead to less Use synonyms
crime
, but Use synonyms
its
Correct your spelling
it's
also
important to consider crimes Linking Words
commited
at home. Correct your spelling
committed
Therefore
, Linking Words
i
do not agree Change the capitalization
I
to
that availability of police officers is the most efficient means Change preposition
apply
in
minimizing the ratio in which Change preposition
of
Use synonyms
crime
are Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
commited
.
The main point to consider is that, In Correct your spelling
committed
the
recent days, hardship and crisis Correct article usage
apply
has
projected Change the verb form
have
significant
amount of individuals into and lack of employment. And Correct article usage
a significant
this
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create
most crimes Change the verb form
creates
such
as Linking Words
steeling
as the only way seen by some people. Correct your spelling
stealing
Therefore
, Linking Words
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the governement
governement
should allocate more resources Correct your spelling
government
into
Change preposition
to
employments
sectors, which will provide sufficient opportunities and will keep people busy. Change the noun form
employment
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, most Linking Words
graduate
in some countries strive to get employed Change to a plural noun
graduates
due to
lack of experience after graduating and Linking Words
this
can cause idealness. meanwhile, they Linking Words
need
earn a living in order to afford basic Add the particle
need to
necessity
.
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necessities
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, longer Linking Words
sentence
and Fix the agreement mistake
sentences
intence
Correct your spelling
intense
purnishment
for Correct your spelling
punishment
Use synonyms
crime
. If no Add an article
the crime
a crime
crime
is left Use synonyms
unpurnished
, people will be very mindful of their Correct your spelling
unpunished
unfurnished
whereabout
and be Correct your spelling
whereabouts
caution
of Replace the word
cautious
commiting
any Correct your spelling
committing
fraudlent
or criminal activities. though Correct your spelling
fraudulent
purnishments
should be realistic and Correct your spelling
punishments
punishment
Use synonyms
crime based
.
To summarize, Add a hyphen
crime-based
availability
of security officers Correct article usage
the availability
such
as Linking Words
police
can minimize the rates of Add an article
the police
crime
Use synonyms
occurance
on the street, but it is not the best method, as it will only protect the street and not Correct your spelling
occurrence
home based
Add a hyphen
home-based
crime
, where most Use synonyms
Use synonyms
crime
are Change to a plural noun
crimes
commited
.Correct your spelling
committed
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task response
Develop your points with relevant examples that clearly illustrate your arguments. For instance, when discussing home-based crime, provide a concrete example of a type of crime that occurs predominantly at home and how it might be addressed.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clarity in your arguments by using precise language and organizing ideas logically. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea with supporting information and examples.
other
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy. In your essay, for example, 'steeling' should be 'stealing', 'purnishment' should be 'punishment', and 'idealness' should be 'idleness'. Correct spelling and grammar are essential for clear communication.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which is essential for guiding the reader through your argument.
supported main points
You've identified key points for disagreement, such as the limitation of police presence for addressing home-based crimes and the role of employment in reducing crime rates.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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