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Band 2.5

People nowdays send than talk on text messages more frequently the Phone What are the reasons for this trend? Do the advantages of texting outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no denying
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the fact
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 that the
phenomena
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phenomenon
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 of texting
message
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messages
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 rather than
call
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calls
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 is most present across the globe
due to
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 its importance.
Majority
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 of folks are in
the
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favour of
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due to
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 its number of merits.
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 some of the people highlight its demerits first. In my
further
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of the same will be discussed. These days many
communicator
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 prefer to text over
telephonic
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telephone
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call
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calls
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.
Texting
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 messaging allows individuals to communicate
at
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there
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their
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 own
time
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, enabling
one
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 to read and respond at their own convenience
time
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, especially
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beneficial
 in different
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zone
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zones
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 or for those with busy schedules.
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,
this
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keep
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clear
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a clear
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 record of keeping
conversation
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conversations
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 for both personal
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 professional communication.
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, if some important information
shared
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, a person not
needed
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 to take
note
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notes
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 or remember
as
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 it's already in written format which can be accessed at any
time
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.
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, reliance on text messaging
cause
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causes
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 misinterpretation compared to face-to-face communication.
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coherence cohesion
Work on crafting a more structured introduction and conclusion to provide a clear framework for your essay. Make sure each paragraph supports your main point and ties back to your thesis.
task achievement
Expand on your arguments and provide more details and examples to make your points clearer and more persuasive. Make sure your essay answers both parts of the task fully.
task achievement
Your essay covers the key points about texting being convenient and the ability to retain records but also touches upon misinterpretations, which shows you understand both sides of the issue.
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Your use of examples, like the mention of time zones and busy schedules, adds strength to your points about why people might prefer texting over phone calls.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • convenience
  • asynchronous communication
  • non-intrusive
  • social media
  • instant messaging apps
  • misinterpretations
  • emotional nuance
  • immediacy
  • efficiency
  • multitasking
  • relationship building
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