Many people in society believe that having fixed punishment for all crimes is a more efficient way of dealing with criminals in the justice system. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment system?

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Some people argue that it is important to have fixed
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for all crimes to increase the efficiency of our judiciary system. In
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plan. The main advantage of having certain
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of punishment for all
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is that it gives the judges a clear guideline,
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could make our judiciary system less costly in handling crimes
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make fixed punishment
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two
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conclusion, the fixed punishment for all crimes could bring its advantages of efficiency.
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task achievement
While your essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of fixed punishments, consider expanding on each point with more detailed explanations or examples.
language
Try to ensure consistency in the use of singular and plural forms in your essay. This will enhance the clarity and accuracy of your expression.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using more transitional phrases to connect ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion, and your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of your essay.
task achievement
You successfully highlight a key advantage of fixed punishment: efficiency in the judicial process.
coherence cohesion
The essay logically presents both a supporting and an opposing point regarding fixed punishment, showing a balanced analysis.
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