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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.
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The line chart provides key information about the
number
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 of new
shops
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 that opened in one nation from 2011 to 2018. The units are measured in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
shops
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that market closures
were
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had
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 a significant effect on their economic growth.
In addition
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, in 2011, there was a moderate
number
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 of
shops
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 closed,
whereas
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 in 2015, they underwent a plunged decline about closures
shops
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.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2011, the
number
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 of
shops
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 were opened around 8500 and ,
otherwise
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 the
number
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 of stores were closed at 6000.
Moreover
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, after one year, there was a dropping in opening markets in roughly half of the past year. In terms of 2015,
this
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 year witnessed a fluctuating
number
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 of
shops
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 whether
it
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they
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 opened or closed.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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