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The pie chart below shows the main reasons. Why student chose to study a particular UK University in 1987 and 2007.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons. Why student chose to study a particular UK University in 1987 and 2007.
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The pie charts illustrate the distribution of the major reasons why pupils select to study at a specific
university
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 in the UK in the interval of 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, It is evident that suitable degree courses
is
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 the main reason in 1987 and in 2007,
whereas
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 , in 1987, the
university
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is
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was
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 close to
parental
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the parental
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 home was the lowest proportion and in 2007, sports and social activities were the smallest figures.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of students who chose a certain
university
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 in the UK because of suitable degree courses increased slightly from 35% in 1987 to 37% in 2007.
Similarly
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, There was a considerable rise in the number of students selecting the reason
of
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 nearest
university
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 to their family from 10% by 1987 to 22% by 2007. In the same way ,
in1987
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in 1987
 the ratio of pupils
chose
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who chose
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 the
university
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 because of
quality
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the quality
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 of teaching was 15%,
then
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 the figure jumped slowly to 18% by 2007.
By contrast
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, the figure related to sports and somal activities witnessed a significant decrease from 19% in 1987 to 17% in 2007.
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, the
university
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's resources quality, where the proportion was 21% in 1987, but it fell to 17% in 2007
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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