Human activities have negative effects on the environment. Some people believe it is too late to take measures to prevent animals and plants from dying out. Others think actions should be taken to improve the situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's world, as a result of humans' actions

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ecosystem has been damaged very badly. There are differing views to as whether it is too late to take preventive actions to prevent flora and fauna from

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disappearing

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solutions can still be adopted. I am completely in favour of the latter view and believe the negative impacts can still be minimised with the right measures.

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the supporters of the first view, the environment has already

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exposed to too much destruction that can not be undone. Those individuals believe that there are already huge holes

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the

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layer, which is responsible for protecting our world from harmful

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from the Sun,

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too much greenhouse gas emissions.

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, these holes triggered global warming and climate changes that do not only pose a threat to flora and fauna but to

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ecosytem

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ecosystem

ecosystems

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, the majority of the forests including Amazon Rainforests, which are considered to be the lungs of the planet, have been erased and deforestated

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infrastructure changes.

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, many animals lose their habitats,

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and

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species are becoming extinct.

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, it will only be too late when whole animals and plants are dead, and until that day the harm to the environment can be reversed or reduced with the right precautions.

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, we know what are the sources of carbon emissions leading to global warming and

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other

problems. The main drivers are mostly transportation, tourism, companies releasing their hazardous gases and substances to nature, and more. Individuals and large corporations must be encouraged or pushed to make more green decisions in their daily

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and operations through

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limitations, penalties,

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rather than doing nothing about it.

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, climate

changes

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would be slowing down notably.

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the goverment

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goverment

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government

must protect forests and other natural

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that accommodate

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of wildlife

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in preserving them and their varieties.

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, despite the opposing views of some citizens, we can still follow the rules of sustainable development and protect the Earth we live on with the right corrective actions and eco-friendly choices in our daily

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task achievement

To enhance task achievement, ensure that the essay fully addresses all parts of the task prompt. Include more specific examples and evidence to support the arguments in both views discussed.

coherence cohesion

To improve coherence, strive to make transitions between ideas smoother. Use cohesive devices like linking words to clearly guide the reader through the essay. Ensure that each paragraph naturally flows to the next, enhancing the overall readability.

task achievement

The essay provides a clear stance on the issue and supports this with logical reasoning, particularly in the second perspective of the debate.

coherence cohesion

The essay includes a structured introduction and conclusion, reinforcing the main arguments presented.

coherence cohesion

There is an effective use of topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph, aiding the reader in understanding the main idea of each section.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

352 words

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Today, there are many advertisements aimed at children, such as advertisements fir toys and snacks. Some people think that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol and as a result, breaking the law. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

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